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As the darkness falls he hears the voices call,
asking forever the same questions,

as every night before he is chilled to the core,

The only way through the dark is truth,
but they are forever telling lies,

He's had enough of these hand cuffs,

He's a broken man but he's breaking through,
He's breaking free,
He's a broken man so he can break through,
and he's broken through to me,

he's telling tall tales of unwalked trails,
he speaks in a voice that he knows,

but now he's realised that he too is telling lies,

he wonders how he found this voice he uses now,
it's too close to that of those,

searching his moods for words that speak truth,

He's a broken man but he's breaking through,
He's breaking free,
He's a broken man so he can break through,
but his lies wont get him what he needs,

Harmonies and songs sung with coiled tongues,
they sing along with all that he says,

he's the leader of the pack with the broken back,

There's no truth in his lines he's lost his spine,
He used to stand strong and alone,

Now he's missing his bones he's just another clone,

He's a broken man who thought he broke through,
He thought he was breaking free,
He's a broken man and he tried to break through,
but he lacked the spine to succeed.
©2007-2009 ~Furnosaurus
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Back into writing ( hahaha back ... get it.. fwar.. I'm on fire lately... )
ahem.... yeah wrote this as a bit of a go at trying my usual... hero becomes villain without knowing it...

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:iconblackenvy:
I thought that was really good actually, I liked the narrative style and the flow to it, great work Shan :D

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A heart at the end of its' tether
Swiftly descending into blame,
Pain lasts only a minute,
Resounds through generations forever;
The aftermath, it spells my name.
:iconfurnosaurus:
oh wow thanks.. blackie cheers for giving us a read... and 'great work' high praise.. from ya ... which is nice... thanks..

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Good taimes...
:iconblackenvy:
You're welcome :aww: None of the people I watch really submit literature, it's always nice to read some.

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A heart at the end of its' tether
Swiftly descending into blame,
Pain lasts only a minute,
Resounds through generations forever;
The aftermath, it spells my name.
:iconfurnosaurus:
oh.. and vice versa... ( but where have you're penned efforts been.. - I've seen a fair bit o digi art.. but not so much written.. you got some up your sleeve?)

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Good taimes...
:iconblackenvy:
Hey I've put up a couple of literature deviations up too! Plus it's pretty hard to find time for creative writing with uni on...I have 3 exams left then I'll have some time for writing. I do have bits and pieces I've been working on but they're all poetry. Can't seem to get into the mood for prose, I need some inspiration :(

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A heart at the end of its' tether
Swiftly descending into blame,
Pain lasts only a minute,
Resounds through generations forever;
The aftermath, it spells my name.
:iconfurnosaurus:
hmmm... what sort of prose might you write

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Good taimes...
:iconblackenvy:
Not sure...possibly another 'stream of consciousness' piece, like my piece "Taken"...but other than that whatever comes to mind.

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A heart at the end of its' tether
Swiftly descending into blame,
Pain lasts only a minute,
Resounds through generations forever;
The aftermath, it spells my name.
:iconjennythegenie:
yay stuff to read now that i'm never online. Seriously though, great work good use of repetition and it flows really well. I especially liked the "he's the leader of the pack with the broken back" line. Nice to see you doing some lit again.

I must do some writing

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if i started making sense the world would end

if your into dark poetry/prose check out this [link] which i am shamelessly promoting
:iconfurnosaurus:
thanks ... I am trying all sorts of different things to my usual.. photog so I may post a couple of short pieces etc

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Good taimes...

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